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Round 2 promtNice Mike watched in disbelief as his companions were taken out of the Downtown Disney in handcuffs, “The cops are winning” he grumbled under his breath. “Only 3 of us left including myself...” he said, slightly louder this time. He knew it was time to gather his remaining bretheren and hide deeper within the compound, and Epcot seemed to be the next logical place. As he climbed down from Planet Hollywood her caught a glimpse of Dani out of the corner of his eye.   
“Hey Dani, I heard there are big, shiny, sharp swords to play with in Epcot if you wanna come...”   
Dani, who had been preoccupi Round 2 promt
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Dani RefName: Dani  Age: 21  Female  Skin Color: Very pale  
Height: 5'5  Hair: Shoulder length brown hair that is matted and tangled  Eye Color: Brown  Very thin.  Clothing: Orange jumpsuit that has been unzipped to the waist, orange bra.  Scars: None  Strengths: Quick, decently intelligent  Weaknesses: A.d.d and addicted to pills  Personality:While on her medication Dani is a responsible citizen who follows most of society's rules. The only rule she does not follow, however, is the rule that says she cannot pop pills. Her addiction to pills quickly led to her devouring all of her adderall Dani Ref
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Nice Mike's SpeechAs the group of convicts followed behind Nice Mike he began to get annoyed that they were relying on him for their freedom. Finally, once he approached Planet Hollywood, he turned around spoke to the group who were watching his every move.   
"Stop following me for two seconds. Look, we are fugitives from the law now, so act accordingly. By now at least one S.W.A.T car, probably two, have unloaded and the officers are moving in on our location now. Do whatever you have to do in order to escape, just leave me the fuck alone!" He said and began to climb to the top of Planet Hollywood.   
The few remaining men looked at each Nice Mike's Speech
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Round 2 Over

Wed Oct 14, 2009, 8:15 PM
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Creativity/Plot:8/10 The plot was good overall, I loved the woman hiding in the booth a lot.The only thing I didn't like was the end. The fact that Nice Mike got knocked out so quick was kind of irritating since he was supposed to be the big boss battle.
Characterization: 10/10 Petrotasia says you got him perfect, how can I argue with that?
Time and Effort: 4/10 A few spelling errors,(seperately, recongnize, olliged)and a few grammatical mistakes. Remember not to start your sentences with "but", you know that. I once wrote a 7 page tourny entry and that thing was a bitch to edit, so I can only guess that you didn't do a thorough read through of this since you were rushing anyway, but "his arms went like they were on fire" could have been fixed with a good run-through. Also, spell check everything. Twice. Also your tenses got mixed up again and I know I told you about that last time too. I stopped taking points off once I got down to 4/10 left to give you credit for the length, but remember, content is whats important. Also, commas. If you read any of my prose you will see a ton of them chillin, because I find them extremely important. I've already put 11 in this paragraph.
Total:22/30

:iconpetrotasia:
Creativity/Plot:7/10 The panels with Dani made me laugh a lot, so thanks for that. On the other hand though your plot wasn't as creative. Why was the big epcot ball rolling around?
Characterization: 10/10
Time and Effort: 6/10 (realise,practise) The panel where August bumps into Pyro looked rushed in that... well... there were no faces. At all. Also, the next to last panel looked very rushed, so I docked you a point for that too.
Total:23/30

Winner: :iconpetrotasia: by 1 point. This just goes to show you how important it is to spell check your work.

:iconorange-ratchet:
Well... you won by default. But if you want a review like the other two got I will type one up for you.

TIME FOR THE FINAL BATTLE!!!!!!

So, what the hell do we do now? Both of you are cops and you're both good guys so... well...

BATTLE ROYALE! IN ANIMAL KINGDOM!

Kidding.

Actual battle plot: Sonata has been kidnapped again by a man in a swat uniform. August thinks it was Gerald since he is the only cop left on the premises. A fight ensues.

The goal of this fight is to knock your opponent unconscious without killing them and without making it easy (no tapping them on the head with a tonfa and having them go down like a sack-o-potatoes).

Also,Gerald is obviously not responsible for it, it was the chief getting her the hell out of there since she tried to re-enter again.

I know this plot is weak, but I couldn't let the final bout not be of you two battling it out, so this is the best I could come up with. Sorry.

The deadline will be November 15th at midnight.

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~Tulalu Sep 11, 2009, 12:48:28 AM
Woooo I'm routing for Petrotasia! :iconcheerplz:
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~Petrotasia Aug 11, 2009, 12:39:39 AM
I really think we need an extension.

btw, is it ok if its ok if its a few days late?

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:icondametaloakblacksmith:
~DaMetalOakBlackSmith Jun 5, 2009, 7:23:07 PM
hey can my character be a hapless employee who missed the mass evacuation?

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~disneydeathcamp Jun 6, 2009, 7:03:59 PM
Normally I'd say no, but how about this, note me on my account :iconcheckminus4life: and we will talk about it
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~DaMetalOakBlackSmith Jun 10, 2009, 8:10:36 AM
ok i sent the note

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~DaneTesston May 24, 2009, 7:39:03 AM
I'm probably nailing shut my own coffen, but I'm thinking of entering because this sound's really cool. I'd like to ask though, can my character have a weapon like a P90 or an AK-47?
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~disneydeathcamp May 25, 2009, 8:08:19 AM
Yes and no. Yes they can have it, but you aren't allowed to shoot (and land a shot) on your opponent. The only way to use it in a fight would be as a melee weapon
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~whitekingdomangel May 2, 2009, 11:14:29 AM
Sounds good. Juts a couple of questions
1. My characters hand is part machine gun so is there any proble with that ?
2. Is there any way that she can use her hat instead of the helment?
3. Could I make some modifications to the regular S.W.A.T. gear?

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~disneydeathcamp May 3, 2009, 10:51:28 PM
1) As far as the hand is concerned well... thats tough. I'd say to avoid that if at all possible since you're not allowed to actually shoot and hit your opponent. Plus if you did have a machine gun hand you'd have a physical advantage over a criminal. Gotta keep things fair you know.
2)As long as it isn't used as a weapon (other than beating), then yes.
3) Change in design and color is fine, but if you give her gear strengths you also have to balance those off with weaknesses. Easiest way to do that would be to figure the stronger the armor, the less armor you can wear this way your opponent has more openings.
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~whitekingdomangel May 5, 2009, 5:49:58 PM
Very well. I'll need to make some modifications to her, but I accept your terms.

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